Thursday, September 14, 2006

Poertry Thursday

This week I chose the challenge of writing in the style of my favorite poet Mary Oliver. Picture each stanza in a diagonal format because blogger refused to allow it. I recently went camping and it was beautiful but very cold for ALS. Worth every moment ;)

A Walk Worth Taking

In fall,
into the forest
of tall pine,
and cedar,

I twirl, looking
to the tops
of their towers
and the windows

to the sky–
and I squint
as the sun
finds its way to my face

warming my body,
tiny fairies dance,
floating in the light,
never falling to the ground—

sweet aroma of pine,
green and
secret haven,
I know,

even as I feel
the exhilaration
my feet are cold my hands
begin to numb

and stiffen
becoming a nuisance—
as I head for
the car,

to warm up
surrounded by the
change to fall.


beccabee2005 said...

There are so many beautiful lines here, I don't know where to start oooing and ahhing - just like when I read a Mary Oliver poem! You have done an beautifiul job of capturing the essence of autumn in the forest -

I squint
as the sun
finds its way to my face

warming my body,
tiny fairies dance,
floating in the light,
never falling to the ground -

All so, so lovely.
What lovely images for me on this early fall day :)

You're amazing! xxoo

jillypoet said...

Your images capture the freedom of the forest! I'll bet the poem works well in diagonal format, mimicing the twirling. I can picture the speaker twirling and looking up, breathing the green and secret in. If it wasn't raining, I'd go out and do it myself right now!

Verity said...

I can totally see that wondrous change to fall, a magical poem. Beautiful.

Madeleine said...

this is such a great poem, Tammy. and Mary Oliver is great, Susannah has shown me some of her work recently.
i could smell the forest as you said that and had some kind of memory flashback as i read it.
i really need to go to the forest soon, and smell the trees.
i am so pleased you had such a good time.


Turquoise CRO said...

ahhhHHH Tammy, you take me back to where I grew up, back upon the hill and to my second family, the trees! I can vision them anytime I want and am nervous about something, like a root canal in the dentist chair! They bring me comfort every time!Trees are very important to me! oh, and about those fairies, are they tiny and white and fuzzy wuzzy looking? I saw one last week and hurried to take a picture but by the time I went back outside the fairy had flown away! and I'm sooooo Glad YOU have that sweet tyke, TK! He sure is a GIFT! xoxoxoo

betty said...

the way you wrote this, I could almost smell the pine as if I was camping with you. very nicely done

Turquoise CRO said...

ps. when is it? the 23rd???!!! xo

Deb R said...

I've had so much trouble getting blogger blogs to load for me today and this was my last try before I head off to bed - it was worth the wait. Both the photo and the poem are just lovely and do a great job of evoking a M.O. kind of mood.

Helen said...

I love this poem. I can picture the green haven and cold that comes with the early fall day. You are so talented!

lisrobbe said...

I loved this! It made me want to jump up form my desk, hop in my care and go take a walk alone in the forrest and take everything in.

paris parfait said...

This poem is beautiful - a true ode to nature's wonders. Thank you.

Amber said...

Wonderful poem! I have been this person, once or twice. I love those walks in the wooods. You got it all right!


Turquoise CRO said...

LOL*** I was close! Wooooo Hooooo! for 45!!!Youngster T! XO

tinker said...

Beautifully done! Glad you had a good time camping - even though cold, it gives you even more reason to snuggle up in the sleeping bag, though ;-)
Loved that photo of you two.

chiefbiscuit said...

That is beautiful - I can just picture it - and smell it!

Sky said...

your poetry brings the trees and fragrance and chill of the air into my senses as surely as if i were there! thanks for the visit in the wooded paradise. i can hardly wait for fall! :)

QUASAR9 said...

Hi Tammy
for you: JAM

QUASAR9 said...

Wishing you
a magical weekend!!!

Belle said...

Hi Tammy,

You made the sights and smells come right into my room.

Love camping too, loved the post

Jemima said...

Thank you, beautiful, especially thank you for a smell. There's not enough to stimulate my nose in verse ;-)