Saturday, September 01, 2007

Sunday Scribbling - "The End"

It was on a cold November day when my life was changed forever. I remembered the focused look on his face as I lay helpless in the ground as he continuously covered me with dirt. I heard each dig of that shovel enter the ground until I felt the darkness and cold surround me completely. Somehow I could breath through the earth as it held me down, in my cold dark tomb. I accepted my fate and simply gave in to it. I lived motionless and oblivious to the world.

One day my cold dark existence began to feel a surge of warmth. I struggled to move from my deep sleep wanting to rise toward the warmth. I fought the earth slowly, but with renewed hope, to transform my fate. I reached the surface and felt the sunlight feeding my strength as I lay weakened from my struggle. Each day I grew stronger, yet felt helpless to move, as the rain quenched my thirst. I began to feel an awakening deep inside to keep moving and survive.

I rose up and felt alive for the very first time. Bursting with joy I rejoiced up to the sky thankful to be alive. In the distance I saw a man who was slowly approaching, watching my revelry. As he drew closer I recognized that face and the shovel he carried. I stood very still as I felt his gaze focused on me. He knelt slowly before me but he was smiling and I was no longer afraid. The man called out over his shoulder and said "hey babe, this one's the prettiest lily I've seen this year" as his gaze turned to pride. My struggles were not in vain as I will touch many lives, again and again.

The End




You guys have awakened Dave's creative juice's after he read the comments on my last post. This morning he asked what SS's prompt was this week and jumped right in. I must admit he is a good idea man but collaborating can be a real eye roller and can end with me asking "don't you have a lawn to mow?" LOL I wanted to make up a story for the very first time and Dave hopes we had you going as we made this up.


37 comments:

Tabor said...

You had me going the first few lines and I was getting a little depressed and then I realized where we were going and enjoyed the ride. Collaboration...wow.

paris parfait said...

It starts out spooky, but ends on a high note. Well done! xo

harmonyinline said...

Beautifully done

Kelly said...

ah, the eye rolling moments...next time make sure you conveniently don't hear him when he asks the question...LOL

Becca said...

I was hoping for a happy ending...and I got it! Great collaboration :)

Inland Empire Girl said...

Good post... and I am glad Dave is joining SS. I look forward to more collaborations!

paisley said...

it was almost spooky... as i felt i had read this before ... until i got to the end of course... excellent write... it felt so utterly familiar,, maybe i had read it in my own soul once upon a time....

Gill said...

That was fantastic. You definitely had me going for a while! Great ending!

tinker said...

Yep, you guys had me going, there for a minute. You guys do great work - the story, photo and the lily itself! XOXO

Kris said...

Awww, that was sooo cute! <3 Good work.

ren.kat said...

Yes. I bought it thinking it was really sick- Nick Cave kind of sick. Now I think I'll have more compassion for lilies :-)

giggles said...

Oh my, did you ever have me going and I chuckled at what I was thinking!! Very well done with that surprise ending! Great collaborating!

Hugs Sherrie

Pacian said...

Outstanding!

Loved it. :-)

Ingrid said...

That was great. In the beginning I thought it was going to be a dark story, but I was surprised it was sweet and beautiful. Thanks for sharing.

gautami tripathy said...

What an end! Very beautifully done!

Regina Clare Jane said...

I think Dave needs to start his own blog!
Beautifully written but I was so scared in the beginning... then, the ending! Very creative- and sneaky!
xoxo

Crafty Green Poet said...

I like this, the unexpectedness of it!

Vedrana M. said...

oh, beautiful! :) words and the photo, just wonderful, xxx

lissa said...

I like the perspective from the flower - didn't realize it at first. A great read!

GreenishLady said...

That is so well-done! You make a great team!

Marie said...

That was amazing! You definitely are great collaborators...and yes, you got me!

I loved your comments on my site. I did feel inspired me a lot. Thanks for visiting.

Shelby said...

great team indeed :)

Jo said...

Thanks for stopping by my blog and for such a kind welcome. I enjoyed this post very much, a great twist!

Cynthia E. Bagley said...

Hey Tammy,

I really enjoyed your story.

Cyn

Star said...

This was a wonderful collaboration :) I know what you mean about the eye rolling. My husband asks each week about the topic for SS and then promptly comes up with something that has to do with him that would fit the topic. Apparently he is to be the focus of any and all writing :) I can roll my eyes and then smile because I know I'm so lucky to have a husband that cares about my interests (and I'm sure you feel the same way).

Patois said...

Talk about clever! You two! I was definitely depressed at the get-go, but found myself emerging as lily did.

kj said...

tammy and dave, this was great!!
the buildup was breath-taking!

tammy, i hope you are well. you two are a great couple. funny how life brings you want you most cherish, huh?

:)

Frances said...

I thought this was going to be a scary story about being buried alive at first.
The first paragraph give syou the shivers.
I like the way it ended:)
Thanks for visting mine

chiefbiscuit said...

You got me! ;) Loved it.

chosha said...

That lily is amazing.

Lucy said...

Daves creative juices sound like they need to be poured into his very own blog! Beautifully written and love the surprise bloom! xo

Jane Poe (aka Deborah) said...

You did have me going!! Excellent piece. xx, JP/deb

Nancy said...

Hi Tammy and Dave,

Great job on this, you guys. You had me going...but yet, I was like,
Oh wow...this is so not Tammy....there must be a catch somewhere". And ya know what? I loved it!

Take care...and get back to the lawn, Dave. (kidding!!)

Love,
Nancy

Hope said...

I needed that happy ending, all that hard work toward freedom and life expecting it to be snuffed out, and then sweet joyous beauty. Very nice.

Redness said...

Loved it - you had me, well done! Thanks to you both.

daisies said...

totally had me ~ perfection you two :)

Amber said...

This was so good! I love it. What if this were true? What if there were souls in the plants and trees?

:)