Sunday Scribbling - "The End"
It was on a cold November day when my life was changed forever. I remembered the focused look on his face as I lay helpless in the ground as he continuously covered me with dirt. I heard each dig of that shovel enter the ground until I felt the darkness and cold surround me completely. Somehow I could breath through the earth as it held me down, in my cold dark tomb. I accepted my fate and simply gave in to it. I lived motionless and oblivious to the world.
One day my cold dark existence began to feel a surge of warmth. I struggled to move from my deep sleep wanting to rise toward the warmth. I fought the earth slowly, but with renewed hope, to transform my fate. I reached the surface and felt the sunlight feeding my strength as I lay weakened from my struggle. Each day I grew stronger, yet felt helpless to move, as the rain quenched my thirst. I began to feel an awakening deep inside to keep moving and survive.
I rose up and felt alive for the very first time. Bursting with joy I rejoiced up to the sky thankful to be alive. In the distance I saw a man who was slowly approaching, watching my revelry. As he drew closer I recognized that face and the shovel he carried. I stood very still as I felt his gaze focused on me. He knelt slowly before me but he was smiling and I was no longer afraid. The man called out over his shoulder and said "hey babe, this one's the prettiest lily I've seen this year" as his gaze turned to pride. My struggles were not in vain as I will touch many lives, again and again.
37 comments:
You had me going the first few lines and I was getting a little depressed and then I realized where we were going and enjoyed the ride. Collaboration...wow.
It starts out spooky, but ends on a high note. Well done! xo
Beautifully done
ah, the eye rolling moments...next time make sure you conveniently don't hear him when he asks the question...LOL
I was hoping for a happy ending...and I got it! Great collaboration :)
Good post... and I am glad Dave is joining SS. I look forward to more collaborations!
it was almost spooky... as i felt i had read this before ... until i got to the end of course... excellent write... it felt so utterly familiar,, maybe i had read it in my own soul once upon a time....
That was fantastic. You definitely had me going for a while! Great ending!
Yep, you guys had me going, there for a minute. You guys do great work - the story, photo and the lily itself! XOXO
Awww, that was sooo cute! <3 Good work.
Yes. I bought it thinking it was really sick- Nick Cave kind of sick. Now I think I'll have more compassion for lilies :-)
Oh my, did you ever have me going and I chuckled at what I was thinking!! Very well done with that surprise ending! Great collaborating!
Hugs Sherrie
Outstanding!
Loved it. :-)
That was great. In the beginning I thought it was going to be a dark story, but I was surprised it was sweet and beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
What an end! Very beautifully done!
I think Dave needs to start his own blog!
Beautifully written but I was so scared in the beginning... then, the ending! Very creative- and sneaky!
xoxo
I like this, the unexpectedness of it!
oh, beautiful! :) words and the photo, just wonderful, xxx
I like the perspective from the flower - didn't realize it at first. A great read!
That is so well-done! You make a great team!
That was amazing! You definitely are great collaborators...and yes, you got me!
I loved your comments on my site. I did feel inspired me a lot. Thanks for visiting.
great team indeed :)
Thanks for stopping by my blog and for such a kind welcome. I enjoyed this post very much, a great twist!
Hey Tammy,
I really enjoyed your story.
Cyn
This was a wonderful collaboration :) I know what you mean about the eye rolling. My husband asks each week about the topic for SS and then promptly comes up with something that has to do with him that would fit the topic. Apparently he is to be the focus of any and all writing :) I can roll my eyes and then smile because I know I'm so lucky to have a husband that cares about my interests (and I'm sure you feel the same way).
Talk about clever! You two! I was definitely depressed at the get-go, but found myself emerging as lily did.
tammy and dave, this was great!!
the buildup was breath-taking!
tammy, i hope you are well. you two are a great couple. funny how life brings you want you most cherish, huh?
:)
I thought this was going to be a scary story about being buried alive at first.
The first paragraph give syou the shivers.
I like the way it ended:)
Thanks for visting mine
You got me! ;) Loved it.
That lily is amazing.
Daves creative juices sound like they need to be poured into his very own blog! Beautifully written and love the surprise bloom! xo
You did have me going!! Excellent piece. xx, JP/deb
Hi Tammy and Dave,
Great job on this, you guys. You had me going...but yet, I was like,
Oh wow...this is so not Tammy....there must be a catch somewhere". And ya know what? I loved it!
Take care...and get back to the lawn, Dave. (kidding!!)
Love,
Nancy
I needed that happy ending, all that hard work toward freedom and life expecting it to be snuffed out, and then sweet joyous beauty. Very nice.
Loved it - you had me, well done! Thanks to you both.
totally had me ~ perfection you two :)
This was so good! I love it. What if this were true? What if there were souls in the plants and trees?
:)
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