Saturday, January 03, 2009

Sunday Scribbling - "for richer or poorer"

United

We are richer united
and poorer in discord
let's become ignited
we are richer united
do not be shortsighted
but collectively in accord
we are richer united
and poorer in discord.


I wanted to start off the new year with something I've never tried, a Triolet poem. I've been watching the economy and the horrors of yet another battle on CNN. This is brief and to the point as I slowly come out of my holiday coma.

The features of the Triolet are:
8 lines.
Two rhymes.
5 of the 8 lines are repeated or refrain lines.
First line repeats at the 4th and 7th lines.
Second line repeats at the 8th line.
A
B
a - Rhymes with 1st line.
A - Identical to 1st line.
a - Rhymes with 1st line.
b - Rhymes with 2nd line.
A - Identical to 1st line.
B - Identical to 2nd line.


http://oriz.deviantart.com/art/Love-Of-Rich-and-Poor-32151264 Photo
http://sundayscribblings.blogspot.com/ Prompt #144 for richer or poorer

24 comments:

Toia said...

I think you did a pretty good job for the first time. Great poem!! Happy New Year!!

Joyce Ellen Davis said...

You are fearless in your writing, and it just keeps getting better and better! Loved the Christmas pics (tent, etc) also on your sidebar.

Where does the time go?

Be well--hope Dave is better today.

Devil Mood said...

It takes a lot of art to do a triolet it seems. I'm not sure I'm reading for that. :P

It seems that it's a great format for strong messages, like in your poem :)

I hope you're doing well!

Granny Smith said...

It is an urgent message these days. I almost dread reading the daily news. I enjoy working with different poetic forms, although the one I fall back upon most often is the sonnet.
I loved your Christmas pictures, especially the boys camping in front of the fireplace. I hope Dave is feeling better and that you are recovering from visitors!
Hugs,
Phyllis

Linda Jacobs said...

I've only treid one triolet and it didn't come out very well. Yours is fantastic! It packs a punch and the repetitions sound fresh each time.

paisley said...

you did a spectacular job with this form,, had i not known it was a form i would never have noticed... that is the true test of a great poet......

anno said...

The rhymes and repetitions you've used here perfectly carry the call of your message. Beautifully done -- and thanks for introducing me to another new form!

Michelle said...

Great poem, thanks!
Hugs,
Michelle

Lucy said...

your never seise to amaze me miss tammy, Poetry Queen!! I've never even hear of a triolet! Unless I am tipsey and pronounce toilet wrong!
You did a great job and speak wisely! xox

Geraldine said...

I think you did a great job too Tammy. Love the photo. United we stand indeed!!!!

Big hug, G

forgetfulone said...

Fabulous! And so creative.

present said...

An interesting poetry form. Well done too! Thank you for the explanation.

Giggles said...

Beautiful in blue over here Tammy. Love the poem and thanks for the format! Hope it is a Happy New Year....I'm a realist, I know history repeats itself. Just never thought it would at this juncture!! United we stand!

I wish you and the world, Happy New year my friend!

Love Sherrie

anthonynorth said...

Great poem. I'm not very good at the 'forms', so, much respect!

Tabor said...

Wonderful job and you did so well that I am really intimidated. But maybe I will try.

Nancy said...

Boy, that was a tough assignment!

Well done as usual.

Heading out to see Abby (and her parents of course!)

Love you,
Nance

Star said...

I love how you keep expanding and growing with your writing. You go, Tammy! I haven't been feeling the poetry-writing love lately, more into personal essays at the moment.

Hugs, Star

Tumblewords: said...

Great job! And the truth is right before us. How can we NOT get it? Wishing you the best in 2009!

Jennifer Hicks said...

this is an INCREDIBLE WORK OF ART!
You are a beautifully creative artist of words. So happy that I found this beautiful work of.........sensational....art......

xoxox
j

p.s.
Who is the woman singing in the background?

Thanks For 2 Day said...

You wrote a lovely poem here Tammy, using a rather complicated form I would say--but who am I to say??!!

I haven't written in any of the poetry forums since last spring. I am now so busy on the gardening site that I don't think I'm going to have time to participate in much else.

Thank You so much for your sweet holiday wishes. I'm sorry I am just now getting over here to say hello:) I hope your Christmas was Merry & that your New Year will be Bright.

I hope your husband will be well soon...it's no fun being sick:( It's so frustrating for you, I'm sure, to not be able to look after him, and having to stay away from him so you can remain healthy.

I'll check back soon! Take good care, Tammy! Jan

Crafty Green Poet said...

its always good to try a new poetic form and youve done well with this one. Happy New Year!

Cathy said...

Tammy, Tammy, Tammy,

I've not been here in so long and here I am enjoying a new form of poetry and pictures that warm the heart.

Your life is so filled with riches.

Thank you for your kind thoughts and stopping by when I'd been so quiet.

Jennifer Hicks said...

had fun looking at your playlist - thanks for pointing me to it! great tunes!

gel said...

I've never heard of this type of poem. Very interesting challenge and you rose to it. Enjoyed your poem- important thoughts you shared there.