Monday, January 29, 2007

One Deep Breath - "Roots/Connection"

I decided to be bold and meditate on my connection with nature without pictures. This is scary for me because my haiku/senryu must stand on their own...yikes! I used my wedding and childhood memories but Issa inspired my senryu on ants ;)

Double rainbows
bless vows as waves listen
God's alter, his creation


Night winds
tossing sleeplessly
windchimes bellow

Morning rain
fragrances are awakened
wet earth plays with senses

Rainbows in puddles
stomped by little feet
wet tarmacs sweet scent

Morning coffee
marching ants across counter
searching aimlessly

25 comments:

Anonymous said...

AhhHHHH! Double rainbows!!! What a beauty full gift GOD gave you and Dave on your wedding day!!! xo, Happy Monday girly!!!

pepektheassassin said...

Loved all of these! There were pictures in my head!

Anonymous said...

You did a great job, Tammy! I admit to using photos as my crutch for writing poetry--it's just where I usually find inspiration.

The first from your wedding is my favorite.

Helen said...

all of these are so good. I love the night winds tossing windchimes bellow. A comforting sound for me. Beautifully done. :)

Anonymous said...

Who needs pictures? Your words give us all the pictures we need - beautiful! Thanks Tammy.

tinker said...

Though I always love seeing your photos - these haikus have more than enough imagery to stand on their own! You had double rainbows at your wedding - how romantic is that - I'm swooning! :-)

XOXO

Crafty Green Poet said...

Double rainbows at your wedding, rainbows in puddles and the wonderful scent of wet earth - lovely images.

Anonymous said...

Sounds like you had a wonderful day!
The last one sounds so familiar... these were all just wonderful, Tammy!

Anonymous said...

These are wonderful, particularly the first and fourth. I love the phrase "rainbows in puddles stomped by little feet." I can just see the adorable little TJ stomping in puddles! xo

Anonymous said...

beautiful! yes, pictures started forming in my head as I read these verses. Awesome!

Anonymous said...

Never fear, they stand most beautifully on their own and even fly!

The one starting with "Nightwinds" is fabulous. And I also really like the ones starting with Morning rain, and Rainbows.

Anonymous said...

I agree, haiku, or any poem, is best when it can stand alone, even when it is based on a photo, and these haiku are good. And, Basho didn't have photos so you are in good company. Photos are also best when they can stand alone and don't need to be explained. (this comment is a second try, I apologize for blogger if gets sent twice)

Neasa said...

Each beautiful on its own, as others have said. I love the image you gave my mind's eye of the ocean waves listening to your wedding vows.

Did you know that Whale (my insistent new friend!) is the Keeper of Records? Maybe the waves told her, maybe she added your wedding to the records that day. Maybe...

Anonymous said...

these are so beautiful, i especially love the morning rain and rainbows in puddles ~ so smile worthy :)

Anonymous said...

Who needs pictures? you draw a most beautiful picture and then it is left to the readers mind and the pictures they have in there head and I am sure that the picture in there head is much more real then any picture you could have put on you blog.Great job....Love Dave

bella said...

efI agree - you don't need pictures because your words paint such vivid sceneries in my mind.
And your chronicles post.. just beautiful!

Anonymous said...

A lovely picture with your words. I could see the splash of the puddle! :)

Anonymous said...

Tammy,
There is no longer any doubt that your words stand alone. To create in the readers mind their own picture interpretations. Beautiful.
btw, I love Barbara!
rel

Anonymous said...

I'm afraid my "connection with nature" is different than yours. Ants marching across my counter would not be searching for long, aimlessly or not. (grin) Morning coffee in one hand, spray in the other.
Patrick http://journals.aol.com/daddyleer/CaregivinglyYours/

Anonymous said...

These are all extremely evocative - I especially love this one:

Morning rain
fragrances are awakened
wet earth plays with senses

I can perfectly smell that damp earth and feel the freshness ~ lovely!

getzapped said...

These are inspring! I've been known to take those chimes down in the middle of the night! I will try my hand at this sometime, going within...Thanks!

Anonymous said...

I LOVE and HEART YOU!!! Tammy!!! LOVE and prayers, XOXOX, Cinda

Anonymous said...

Your talent impresses me more all the time. I especially like the "morning rain" one...yet they're all almost as special as you.

Hugs,
nancy

Sandy said...

Tammy, you hit all the senses! These are great.

n.b. said...

Wow, great work. I particularly like the last one: morning coffee and ants.