Wednesday, June 04, 2008

3WW - "Transformation"

Photo by Dave

Deny - Smile - Uncomfortable

Transformation

Locked inside her skin
safety warms her
bleeding heart
as self doubt
festers

Uncomfortable on the outside
she turns on herself
emptying of soul
hopelessness
grows

Love is a power she can't deny
as it draws her outside
confidence builds
making me
smile


26 comments:

Brian said...

Oh Tammy. You always make me tear up.

((((((((hugs))))))))

R.E. Taylor said...

I can see a pattern forming from all of the challenge posts. One title 'An uncomfortable Love'.

Great Job.

pia said...

It's strange how heavily (pun not intended)weight can wear a girl/woman down.

It's something that I struggle with and used to win but each crash diet would leave its mark and it's so so hard

Great poem :)

Deana said...

Absolutely beautiful.

forgetfulone said...

Very beautiful poem! Thanks for visiting my 3WW.

pjd said...

Visually beautiful as well as deep. Interesting when juxtaposed with the animated butterfly woman gif. Hmm.

Lucy said...

BEAUTIFUL! All of us Moms, we just want our kids to feel happy! :))

daisies said...

oh yes ... this one really touched me ... you have such talent honey, xo

TC said...

It's a tough issue, but I don't think there is anything in this world than can sap self confidence quite like weight.

WriterKat said...

Beautifully expressed, I like the turning on herself. It is so true.

paisley said...

the visual of the poem,, in combination with the words is nothing less than brilliance!!!!

Linda Jacobs said...

I like how the shape of the poem mimics someone who yoyo diets! Excellent! Been there!

gautami tripathy said...

You couldn't have said it better..

texasblu said...

This is incredible Tammy. So much happening - brilliant! :)

JP/deb said...

A poem written with love, empathy and hope ... gorgeous, xx, JP/deb

anthonynorth said...

Perfect. In words and image.

Anonymous said...

Hi Tammy, I enjoyed reading your poem. It's very poignant and reflexive. I especially liked the lines:
"Uncomfortable on the outside
she turns on herself". I also liked the poem's positive conclusion.
David Mascellani.

fearfullymade said...

Tammy, this is just lovely!

Daily Panic said...

I too struggle with my weight, my mom is always the first to tell me - "you look fat" In her culture it is a compliment, so I take pride that she even notices me. I hope your daughter feels the love you express for her.
great post!

Rae Trigg said...

Wonderful poem. A struggle with weight is never easy.

one more believer said...

it is a beauty... i love that you love and she loves too.. over at readwritepoem thrz this this week's prompt and it links to a verbal 2 minute poem... homage to my hips by lucy clifton.. dynamite!! when i read yr loving poem i thought of homage to my hips... i hope you enjoy!!

Amarettogirl said...

This was absolutely stunning! So beautiful, sad but STRONG and inspirational. Wonderfuul job with the 3ww words and what excellent writing!!
here is my 3WW:
http://amarettogirl.squarespace.com/the-written-word/

tinker said...

Tammy (and Dave) - the photo and the poem work together like a hand in a glove - you guys make a great team!
xox

Chris said...

That is one complex butterfly! I thought all that they are thinking about is "Oh, this flower tastes nice." I had no idea they could be so existential :) :) :)

I'm such a brat;)

Fledgling Poet said...

This was so beautiful...even visually!

Giggles said...

Very much a tear jerking, written with soul!

Hugs Sherrie